the most factor that considered for my decision in picking a college is about cost. everybody knows that college education needs a lot of money.
the cost of college education will become more expensive a long with the distance from my hometown. i concern a lot of that problem because i'm afraid that my family couldn't afford it. and i don't want to burden them with my college fee. but the condition will be different if i get a scholarship. i will no doubt in taking college education in foreign country, so that i could reach my dreams.
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hmm...masih banyak yg kurang pas...tapi gak sempet koreksi nih..haha...besok2 deh...^^
the factor that have most influenced me to choose a college is its cost (haa merubah arti banget)
college education diganti jadi studying at college (eh ngaruh gak ya haha)
kayaknya lebih enak kalo I give a lot of concern about this problem kali ya.. (kalo mau present tense) ~tp kayaknya mending i have giv-- eh verb3nya give apa yak x_x)"\
more expensive a long with the distance from kok rasa2nya aneh
i'm afraid if
i will have no doubt to continue my study at foreign country because i could reach my dreams
dah, gatau lagi. eh btw sy jg ga bs grammar da ^^)v masih suka salah, masih belajar. tp kata guru writing sy, grammar itu gak terlalu penting, yang paling penting dalam suatu paragraph adalah
~topic sentence (kalimat utama) harus jelas, harus satu ide
~coherence, keterkaitan antar kalimat
menurut sy 2 kalimat terakhir itu kurang nyambung. scholarship sama foreign country. trus my dreams---my dreams yg mana, yg apa. (lho kok malah menggurui gini. heu. inilah efek dari koreksi dosen secara terus menerus,, sori9... x_x)
jgn tanya gw... wakakakakk..
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